Can you answer the following questions without looking somewhere else for the answers?
- What is expository text? What are some examples?
- What is narrative text? What are some elements of narrative text?
- The main events in the story are called the _________. The side stories and mini-stories within the BIG story are called _________.
(The answers are located at the bottom of this posting!)
So, we have had quite a journey so far. We have really thought about writing and reflected about being writers. Here are some topics we have covered:
- What kind of writer are you?
- REVISING
- What inspires us?
- Developing a character!
- Story Ideas
- Plot
I think it's time for some WRITING. How do you feel about writing a short holiday themed narrative using the conversations we have had so far? Well, I hope you feel good about it...because it is what I am asking you to do!
The prompt I am giving you aks you to write a narrative piece. Think about the plot diagram we looked at last week to "plot out" your story? Make sure your story has all the elements of a good PLOT (set the stage with character and setting, rising action, climax, falling action, and resolution).
Your story can be as short, or as long, as you see fit. Write enough to tell the story!
PROMPT:
Tell about a time you had special holiday wish.
- What is expository text? What are some examples? Expository texts provide information. Some examples are non-fiction books, textbooks, and reference books.
- What is narrative text? What are some elements of narrative text? Narrative texts tell a story. They include setting, characters, and a plot.
- The main events in the story are called the plot. The side stories and mini-stories within the BIG story are called subplots.
Lily the little dog and her big adventure
ReplyDeleteIt was a nice day and we were going to get a little surprise. I noticed we were gone from the house for a long time and I was getting suspicious. When we got to our destination I noticed we were at a Hardys. I thought that it was very weird, because we drove this far to a place I didn’t even think was very good. I soon saw my mom and dad get out of the car and not walking to the fast food place, but a car?
I decided to get out to, so when I got out I saw the cutest thing in the whole Universe! It was a puppy! I thought to myself is this the day we actually get a dog? Jeremy (My big brother) took the dog and put her in the car. That explains why there was a blanket in between us.
The dog was so cute she was exploring around the car and was being so sweet. She gave Jeremy and I some kisses it was so cute. When we got home I was afraid that something bad might happen, but I just invited my friend over and we had fun with the puppy. She explored the house, sniffed the new smells, and took a nap. I still till this day love my puppy and give her everything she needs.
I love Lily! Anyways it is so great that you write stories about your dog. Very creative!
DeleteI love how you realated to your on life. How come you never told me that you got your dog at Hardies?
DeleteI love this adventure! You kept me in suspense the entire time! I love Lily!
Deletei really like it becuase it's and adventure
DeleteTnia barbour
Hi I am Lily! Do you have a holiday wish? Because I do, it is to get a (drum roll please…).DING DONG DING DING. Oh come on I was about to talk. “Hello any one home?” “Special delivery”. I bet it is one of my brothers weird friends again! Hey, what if we prank him and act like we are old ladies. “Oh come here you delivery guy” I say in a old voice. “Oh old lady I cannot leave until you sign”. Said the delivery guy. “So you want me to sign, well it’s not happening!” Forgetting about the old voice. “Wait you are Lily Ryan’s sister!”’ Are you a stocker?””Nope this is very special and it is for you from your brother Ryan.” After 3 hours of pranks I decide to open the door. He said “you could not wait all day, could you?” .”Wow Ryan you were there all this time!” I open the package finally OMG it was a puppy, “I think I will name her Sparkie! ”Oh yeah I almost forgot this was my holiday wish a Puppy. So whats yours?!
ReplyDeleteI love the way that Lily gets interupted during her speaking, but then it all works out in the end because she still gets to let the people know what her holiday wish tells her holiday wish. Very creative! I think the relationship between Lily and Ryan is interesting because neither my sisters or brother would ever go far enough to give me a real live animal.
DeleteYou kept me questioning what was happening next! Nice job!
DeleteIt was just a normal day,a sunshine filled the sky.It was time for soccer practice but there was no one to bring him.He thought and thought then it hit him, ask his neighbor to bring him.He walked over to his neighbors house and no one was there.Then i asked my other neighbor but there wasn't anyone there.I went home and I thought and thought and though.Then it hit me I should call a friend and see if they can bring me.So then I called and asked them, then next thing I knew I was at soccer practice.
ReplyDeleteYou character definetly had a problem that took several tries in getting solved. Nice!
DeleteThere was a boy named Marvin he had to do a blog, and Marvin had to do a lot of things. But then one day when he was posting, it didn't go through. The next day he told his teacher that it didn't go through. Then the teacher said the he can do it at school. so for the next cupple of weeks he never had time to do the blog, he had to bring homework notes home. Then one day he tried to do it at home. He tried a lot of times, then he tried it one more time. And it worked so he kept doing the blog at home for the rest of the year.
ReplyDeleteI think that you dedicated this story about yourself because I think I did overhear you saying your internet wasn't working
DeleteParker did you realate tis to school? It sure sounds like it.
DeleteNice! You kept me smiling the entire time!
DeleteThis is what I have been waiting and training my whole life for. This is a once in a lifetime opportunity. (I am at the olympics). I really want to win the gymnastics gold medal, and be famous! It just seems that I am the least talented here. This other chinese girl has not once messed up. I start my beam routine, and here comes the backflip! I stumble, and the crowd gasps in harmony. I happen to finish the rest of the routine nicely even though I am sweating, stressing, and scared. The next girl in line gave it her all. Then she stumbles to a big fall! Then much later are the winners. I do not win the gold, but I win the silver! Man am I happy to accept it eith a big smile on my face as the call my name "Cyntheia Hoover takes home the gold!"=D All that hard work has finally payed off!
ReplyDeleteThat was Cyntheia's holiday wish was, and she got it.
DeleteI love the story! I believe it is you! I know you will win a gold someday! I can just see it on TV now.
DeleteIt was the night before Christmas Eve. A little girl named Charlette could'nt decide what she wanted.She wanted every thing,but her mom said she could only have fifteen things.So she had to decide.She decided to only get ten things and five things later.She decided to get a fake dog ,a tablet,a bike, clothes,shoes,Jordans, Elevens,dolls,and a walkie talkie.So now it was Christmas day. When she woke up she ran straight to the tree. When she got there she saw all the things she wanted .Charlette said "she would never foget this day".She never fogot this day,and she never stopped playing with her toys.
ReplyDeleteNice story. Did you get any of the items Charlette requested?
DeleteElla loves Christmas. She wished for a new bike. Her old bike is too small for her. Ella loves playing outside with her friends. It was hard for her to go to bed on Christmas eve. Then she fell asleep dreaming about her new bike if Santa brings it to her. The next morning she woke up at 5:30am. She woke up the rest of the family. Ella really wanted to open presents. When she got down stairs she was upset because she did not get a new bike. Then her dad went straight to the garage . That is when she saw her new bike with a bow on it. After that Ella asked her dad if she could ride her bike and he said "Let's open the rest of the presents." When she opened one of the presents she also got a new helmet. Ella thanked Santa by sending him a letter to the reindeer and Santa Claus. In two days, she got a letter back from Santa. She screamed when she got the note. Santa was watching her and she said, "Thank you!" Santa was laughing and said, "You're welcome!". Santa put Ella on the nice list. The next year, Ella was really good.
ReplyDeleteI love the suspense! It's cool that you added the helmet.
DeleteThere was a timid snowman called Snowy. Snowy was afraid of being outside alone. We told him we could bring him inside but he said he would melt. So we brought a lot of snow in the house. Now we can enjoy Snowy for the rest of the winter.
ReplyDeleteChristian(Mrs.Barbour)
This made me think of if it was going to snow outside it would be fun and would give some ideas for writing
DeleteI love snow and snowmen! I love how you made it possible for Snowy to come into the house.
DeleteI like Snowy the snowman you did the right thing to hlep him out.
DeleteEvery thing was always quiet and peaceful in Moonlite way.It was a sunny summer day when the incident occurred.
ReplyDeleteJack was playing his laptop when suddenly he was teleported into a strange environment he didn't know. There were tall trees, weird glowing plants, and a group of dudes wearing cool armor and helmets. Jack was wandering around when a small robot like thing. Jack remembered seeing that thing before, then realization dawned on him. He was in his video game. He saw no more aliens for a while.
Problems started when every thing blacked out and he whizzed into a mess of wires and (computer) chips. He guessed that the game shut down. Back to the problem at hand he realized if the laptop turned off he would be stuck in the computer forever. He immediately started whizzing around trying to get out.
Suddenly he saw a big light coming out of the wall, the power cord is coming out of the input. This was his only chance. He broke for it. He whizzed toward it at top speed. The hole was closing fast. He slid under and made it.
He was back in his bed room. what did he have to say the box said "you feel like you're in the game."
I began to think of starwars. Becasue there are robots and becuse its like a video game!
DeleteGreat adventure! I love the problem and how it was solved.
DeleteOnce i had a wish for everyone a good life.It's hard to make someones life great but then i thought what if i get people to help from across the united states of america.Then i got people to help others and now they all are helping other people.
ReplyDeleteI can't believe that you got people from all over America to help other. You are a hero!
DeleteI love the idea of everyone across America helping.
DeleteMason I like what you did with the blog. That you helped dacross the united states of america.
DeleteIt was a gloomy day in Virginia.The rain has just stopped and Christmas
ReplyDeletewas coming.Jordan loved Christmas more than anyone! But,will her one
wish jeopardize her friends and everyone else? One day she was hanging
up decorations in her room.Her one wish was to have everyone be in the
Christmas spirt.She looked at the calendar,it was 12/12/12! Jordan had
heard if you made a wish at 12:12 on the day of 12/12/12 it would come
true! The time was 12:12! She made her wish quickly. A gust of wind
came in the room. Nothing happened so she went outside to play with her
friends. When she looked outside the houses looked different. They were
all lit up and colorful. Jordan thought everyone finally got in the
Christmas spirt!One of her friends was Jewish and they had Christmas
decorations on there house.She thought it was not fair that she ruined
their Jewish tradition.So, Jordan went over to her friend Macy's house
and told her she didn't have to celebrate Christmas if she is Jewish
and she should just celebrate Hanukah.Then her Macy said the weirdest
thing.She said that she didn't know what hanukah was.Jordan was
confused.Didn't she know what hanukah was? Just then Jordan thought
about her wish.When she wished that everyone would have the Christmas
spirt it meant everyone even Jewish people.Jordan ruined every Jewish
person holiday! So she asked her Macy if she could come in. She said
yes. When she went in the inside Macy's house she thought it looked
pretty good with all the colorful lights and decorations.There wasn't
any menorah anywhere.Jordan met Macy's parents and then told them if
they knew any thing about hanukah.Ok course they said no. Jordan tried
to tell them about hanukah and it didn't work. She tried doing a play
about hanukah. Of course it didn't work. Also Jordan tried dancing, but
it didn't work. Now Jordan was about to lose hope and just forget about
it. Then she thought about singing. She was scared about singing
because she wasn't a very good singer, but she tried anyway. Once she
finished her song a gust of kwind came in the room. Jordan looked
outside, not all the houses were colorful. She looked at her fiends
house. It was all hanukahy inside. Macy asked if Jordan wanted to play
outside. Jordan learned that if you wish for something you want, your
not thinking about others. The end!
This story teaches that if you want something think outside the box at other people around you or something like what happened Jordan will happen to you.
DeleteI love your lesson learned. You are such a thoughtful person!
DeleteAustin(barbour)
ReplyDeleteBubble gum
One day my friends and I were blowing
bubbles from bubble gum and fffffeeeeeeeewwwwwwww!!!!! We blew giant bubbles and they came together!!! the next we know we are in the bubble....ughh ohhh we are rising!! We can't come down and every time someone walked on the road we yelled for help but they never came! Finally a jet came and shot bullets into our bubble and we were falling!!!!! Booommmmm! we crashed into a house and landed on the houses bed.We had to pay for the houses insurance. Luckily the jet guy got a picture of us in our bubble and he spreaded the picture world wide. When it got to the people that make the geineus world record books, they picked up the phone called us and said we were in the 2013 one. We won 1 million dollars!!!! And instead of paying for their house insurance we bought them a mansion!!! In their new house they lived happilly and we never chewed bubble gum again
The end
I wonder what the flaver of bubble gum was?
DeleteI love the way you set up the story. It was cool!
DeleteI can't belive that you got into the world record book for crashing your house! So funny!
DeleteI love the adventure and its turnout. It's not what you would expect.
DeleteI like how you and your friend got stuck into a bubble and started floating off.
DeleteI was in a great city, it was peaceful and pretty much perfect. Until one day a wall exploded and a lot of monsters started pouring out, and people were attacked and some even killed. That was when I, Steve, ran to the armory so I could fight. I got two battle axes, two long swords, and a satchel of throwing knives. I also got some armor. now I'm ready to fight!
ReplyDeleteI went out, slain some guans (most current monster) and ourangauans(mutant guans).I got injured a lot and I thought I was going to die, but didn't. I then killed the king guan and the rest of them too.
I destroyed most monsters on the planet, and went after the creator, Jack. I went to his hide out and attacked. I lost but survived. Two days later I attacked again and WON! I didn't kill him though, I made him not be able to make monsters anymore. I went back to town and everyone left, cheered and sang songs and cheered some more! After the celebration,I went back home and hung my sword over the fireplace so I could remember this day forever.
this corrector is like coal from a video game called infamous if you good you destroy all the minions but keep the creator alive
DeleteTai I love how you desribed the weapons. The guans were pretty creative
DeleteI really enjoyed the way you solved the problem. Nice!
DeleteDylan’s Holiday Wish
ReplyDeleteToday was Dec. 23. Dylan wanted a supercomputer from Dad’s company. But, I know he wanted something else…………
Hello. I’m Dylan. I’ve had the best life. Until…. that day. It was scary that day. I wish I took Kaylee. She wouldn’t have perished…… Oh, well, it’s past that. I want a supercomputer from my Dad’s company. Mom said maybe. I want to pay off some of it. “Will I be able to have that super computer?” “Maybe. If we have enough in stock.” He says coldly. Golly! I only asked once before. That was yesterday, though! Well…. right now I’m at the actual place where Dad works. Yippee! “Woah. It’s bigger than I thought!” I say aloud. “How big did you think it was gonna be?” says Mr. Hermes, one of Dad’s associates. At least that is what it said on his name tag. “Hi…. I mean… Hello! Don’t you work on the supercomputer?” I ask. “Yes.” says the man. He sounded weird when he said that. Like he didn’t want to say that. “Do you have any in stock?” I ask. The man looked down like he didn’t want to answer. “No.” Thirty minutes later, I am crumpled in my bed. My mom and dad ask me if I am fine.
“I’m fine!” I lie. I am not fine.
Meanwhile, back at my dad’s building……
“OK,” my dad says. “Is there any way to speed up the process?” Mr. Hermes says, “Well…. we will need one of our power cubes and a team of intelligent people.” “Let’s just use the supercomputer team.” one of the other associates says. “Alright. But, this doesn’t guarantee it’ll be ready by Christmas Eve.” Mr. Hermes says. “OK.”
One day later…
I don’t want to do anything. The supercomputer was the only thing he wanted (or was it?). Now it’s gone. “It’s ok, Dylan. Something might turn up.” Mom says. “I doubt it.” I say. For the rest of the day, you probably know how it went. Festive, this. Present, that.
Another day later……
I’m worried about today. I remember the words Mom said yesterday. ‘Something might turn up.’ I go downstairs. Mom and Dad are standing at the end of the stairs, smiling. “Merry Christmas!” they say. I wish it was, I think. Mom and Dad don’t usually do this. It’s weird. I rip open the present and open the box all while I talk. “Come on, guys. Don’t try to cheer me-“ and that’s when I saw it. The SUPERCOMPUTER. Yep. The XXT56. That’s what I heard they called it. Wow. “Wait-how-wha?.........” “We tried to speed up the process. It worked.” Dad says. “Why are you dressed?” I ask. “Please don’t kill me, but, I need to take it back for something.” I feel like I was punched- “Wait!” he interrupts my thought. “We just need to copy it so we can sell it across the world. It’ll only take fifteen minutes calculate the time.” Thirty minutes there, fifteen minutes in there, and thirty minutes back. “You’ll have it back in-“ “One hour and fifteen minutes.” I interrupt. OK. I can wait that long. “Thanks dad.” “You’re welcome.”
The suspense is perfect! Nice job!
DeleteBeginning:
ReplyDeleteToday, on December 19th, 2012 it was a sunny afternoon in the busy city of Los Angeles. A boy named Izzy went shopping for Christmas presents for his family. He went with his older sister. Even though he was shopping for his family he saw alot of things he would want. It was too bad though because he already had 12 presents! But the one thing that Izzy really wanted for Christmas was for his dad to come back. His dad is in the Navy so he has been gone since last Christmas for a one year cruise. The one thing Izzy didn't know was that he was going to get the best Christmas present ever!
Rising Action:
Izzy was so excited. His dad was coming back in 5 days. The days kept on passing by and it was the day before Izzy's dad came from his voyage. Izzy and his family left home and went to the airport to pick up Izzy's dad. It was almost here. He kept on tensing up and then something completely unexpected happened.
Turning Point:
The flight attendant said that the plane Izzy's dad was on was having problems and was deverted to Nevada instead of California!!! Izzy was devestated. There was still one solution though.
Falling Action:
Izzy and his family had to drive to Nevada if they wanted to see him today. They decided to go. They drove to Nevada's airport and were looking around nonstop. Suddenly, Izzy's dad surprised him and his family with a big hug from behind.
Resolution:
That day was a happy day for Izzy because he got his holiday wish. They headed home and went to sleep on that beautiful Christmas Eve. The next morning it was Christmas. Everybody went downstairs and opened their presents. They were all happy with what they got. Izzy liked his presents, but he was so happy he got his number one wish. For his dad to come home.
The End!!
Aliyah that was beautiful! I love it how you labled your parts so the readers could know what parts they are reading. I love your charector Izzy he has real problems just like me.
DeleteAwww! I love the suspense and ending. I agree with Maddie. I love the way you labled the story.
DeleteGood job Aliyah! I love this story . I love it so much especially when you put those words indicate when it is time to change to the next action. Keep up the good work cuz I know you will. Do the best you can to make your story great, there is always room for improvement. In this story I highly doubt there is any room for improvement, and even though there is room in every story to make the whole thing better. :-)
DeleteIt was one regular winter morning. Journey woke up late. She woke up late enough to skip breakfast and skip school. Journey didn't care, but he parents DID. Journey was very excited because for Christmas she wanted a Thurkle. A Thurkle is a notepad with mind readers attached and you attach the mind readers to your head by holding them there and think what you want. She could write a whole story without moving muscle.
ReplyDeleteAfter being rudely rushed out the door Journey was on her way to school. When she arrived at school there was a contest going on. The contest was who ever can guess the most raisins in the bucket wins a Thurkle. She really wanted one because she can jot down clever ways to get revenge on people. Journey pushed her way through the line, doing this could guarantee her a Thurkle. For the line was way too long. By the time she got to the front the host was already giving away the Thurkle. When school ended Journey trudged all the way home. All the chances of her getting a Thurkle had just slipped out of her hands. Then Journey realized not all hope was gone. She still had her parents and she knew they had already bought her a Thurkle. She ran the rest of the way home. When she got home she asked her parents if they already bought her a Thurkle. Her mom and dad feared to explain the bad news. "Journey, honey, we were at the store buying a Thurkle it was right in the cart and we turned around for one minute and a little boy ran off with it in his arms. That was the last one," said mom and concluded dad.
Journey was sad to hear the news. She really had thought that her only chance of getting a Thurkle was gone. But then she decided to pull out her secret weapon. SANTA CLAUS! She whipped up a quick and sweet letter telling Santa exactly what she wanted and hopped down the stairs to tell her mom to mail her letter right away. She knew she had to get to the point because there was only four days until Christmas. Journey's mom nodded and went off.
On Christmas morning Journey woke up sure that there would be a Thurkle sitting under the tree. She went downstairs to eat breakfast and that's when her mom and dad hit her with bad news again. They told her that they had forgotten to mail the letter. Journey's face filled with tears. Now she knew for a fact she wasn't getting her gift. Journey opened her presents first wondering what the first one could be. She opened it up and it was a Thurkle! She was thrilled. Then she realized that her mom and dad didn’t buy it, and they forgot to mail the letter. Journey read the name on the package, it said "From your pal Santa." Journey was really surprised this time. She had her dream gift and a package from Santa Claus. This truly was a Christmas miracle.
I love your character and the Thurkle! It is definitely suspenseful!
DeleteHey that is my story. I love it so much it took a lot of time and work. Continue I can a to keep up the creativity. I am always looking to boost my self esteem.
DeleteFloating free in silence with only the hint of a heartbeat. Crystal Waters and her best friend, LJ, scuba dive down the Rainbow River in search of sights that will stop your heart. Crystal wishing the entire time that she owned this business,
ReplyDeleteCrystal's favorite sport is scuba diving. She has all the equiptment needed to share that sport with others. Money is the real factor.It seems like it's always money that interferes with her dream of owning a scuba dive shop. She only needs someone to cosign on a loan and that shop would be hers.
Her parents think she is foolish because it takes a lot of money to enjoy this sport. "People will not be willing to pay for this!" they say. She is determined to prove to them that they are wrong. In the back her mind an idea is brewing, and she needs help from LJ. Together they will show her parents how successful this could be if they would just sign their name on a loan paper. The 2 girls decide to have a fundraiser in Crystal's swimming pool.
They post advertisements everywhere saying, "Come try breathing under water with fish. A free scuba lesson is offered tomorrow." 2 people show up, and Crystal fears her parents will be more determined now not to sign. LJ has an idea that will help get more people involve. "Let's set up at the river where all the family picnics take place."
Their stomachs move as the current in a river moves. Anxious for many participaters. All gear is at the river bank, and the time draws near. Waiting is a horrilbe job!
Then they see it! A great wave of heads begin bobbing over the hill as bodies are revealed wearing swim suits and snorkel gear. Hundreds of free lessons are given that day. Many of those people sign contracts saying they want to be certified to dive by Crystal. Then and there her business begins.
Crystal's parents are so proud and impressed at her eagerness and success of the day. NOt only do they sign a contract to be cetified, but also the loan paper allowing her the opportunity to fill her dream.
Business is great! Crystal's schedule is full. Money is no obstacle now. Living in the debths of the coral reef lies an obstacle that she doesn't see. Will this one be her end?
I was suprised when the parents said that the buisness will not sell and be a failure. I akso like the way the plot went.
DeleteNice suspense and plot Mrs. Barbour. I can't belive they said there kids dream would be a failure. :)
DeleteIt was one week before Christmas and Lucy was thinking of things she would give to her mom but she had no clue what to get.
ReplyDeleteLucy tried to ask her sisters what her mom would like but they didn't know either. She tried to think of ideas but none of them really stood out. If she asked her mom what'd she like her mom would easily know what she would get. The next day at school she asked her friend what she was giving her mom for Christmas and she said a card. Lucy thought that it was very dull until she thought it was a good idea.
That afternoon Lucy got paper, crayons, and markers out. She wrote Merry Christmas on the front and she wrote special things about her mom. Her card was very colorful. On Christmas morning her mom opened the present and read it. After she read it she thanked Lucy and hugged her. She loved it! Lucy was very happy.
The End.
Great plot,beginning ,ending very nice story.
DeleteChristian(Barbour)
I like the way the plot went.
DeleteI loved how Lucy asked everyone she knew about what to get her mom for Christmas. That was a good idea.
DeleteI love the plot line. It's a unique story.
DeleteJosh lives in a world were nobody celebrates christmas exept him. In this world nobody sings, have parties, and give presents. Josh tries to find a way to show christmas spirit by bying presents for his friends, but they still just mope around and act bored. Josh throws a party for the nieborhood. At the party nobody dances, talks, and they don't have fun. Finaly on Christmas eve Josh just loves his family and celebrates the new year.Then every body started acting jolly and kind. It was all because Josh showed his kindness.Then every year the nieborhood had a big party.
ReplyDeleteI love the morel in this story. Also I loved Josh soled his problem by showing kindness.
DeleteI love the idea of your character being the only one who celebrates Christmas. This is a great problem that he works through.
DeleteFabulous job Maddie. I know a lot of people in this world who are like Josh. I love where this all comes from. The one thing I really love that you can make this short and sweet at the same time. Keep up the good work never loose your creativity. Most of all I never lose your craziness when it comes to writing.
DeleteYou go Mrs. Barbour! I love this story because it gives you the feel that it is okay to follow your dreams. Keep up the good work cuz I love you and you always teach us well.
DeleteOnce upon a time there was a story of a marker who crawled up Santa Color's slaegh while he was giving colors to good markers and markets. Well the marker's name was Muddy. Muddy grew up in the North Gold. But no marker had ever been to the North Gold so there was a crayon who had never had a child of his own he was too much in to making colors. So he adopted Muddy.
ReplyDeleteOver time Muddy had grown twice as much as the other crayons in such little time. One day when Muddy was making toys he had come across Blurple. Blurple was the head crayon "Muddy you need to make more toys" said Blurple. "Lets face it im a cotton headed ninny muggins" said Muddy. "No Muddy your a great toy maker" and Muddy was always appreciated.
Your characters are very interesting!
DeleteThat story is great Hunter. I love though whole concept. Keep up the good work.
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ReplyDeleteFunny Duuny Don
One day Don was at schoool where he does not have a nickname. At school everyone has a nickname. There is Cheesy Chee Chee, Polar Peter, Rockin Robby, Poppin Parker, and his best friend Duckin Donavan.After P.E. Don went to his locker and thought of a nickname for himself. He named himself falling dalling Don, but everyone just laughed at him. He kept coming up with more and more. Every single one he got laughed at. Then one day his friend duckin Donavan said why don't you be funny dunny Don. So after that day he was known as funny dunny Don. Now everyone at Lancster middle school has a nickname.
The charitors remind me of peps. at our school.(peter,robby,parker,and Donovan)
DeleteI bet miss Barbour is going to compare this to odd velvet.
DeleteYou know I love alliteration! I love the character names!
DeleteHello my name is Sparkle. I am a dog.I love my humans. I expecialy enjoy walking them.They are fun to play with but when we go to the park with a ball they all ways loose their ball and I need to get it for them.Allthough come to think about it ,it would be fun to be a human so today i am going to find the wise old Winky dog to see if he can make a potion to turn me into a human. Even if it is just for a day. Pant,pant,pant. All most there...UFF stinking tree. UUU O I never should have said that... RUN ITS ALIVE!!! So I ran all the way to the wise old Winky's house therre i got the potion and drank it.Then I proudly walked myself home on 2 legs.When I got home,every one was worried sick about their lovable dog.It was so sad watching them.Finaly, when I couldn't bear it any longer and ran as fast as my 2 legs could carry me [which isn't very fast] all the way back to the wise old Winky's house, turned back in to a dog and ran home to my humans. I think I will let the humans be humans and let dogs be dogs.
ReplyDeleteWow! Very creative Jacqueline
DeleteNice! I love the plot line!
DeleteMeowy Catsmas
ReplyDeleteIt was December 24th at ten in the morning, when Princess heard a "meow" at the door. She opened the door and gasped. "A kitty!" she squealed with triumph and happiness. "I'll give this to Saraphine." Princess said cooly. The small cat was gray with tinges of blue on her pelt and silver aiound her muzzle. The cat padded under Princess slowly and on heavy paws. Princess noticed that the cat had a swolen belly. "She is about to have her kits!" Princess exclaimed.
A few hours later, Princess noticed that the cat's belly was less swolen. Then Princess knew she had to find them. Just at that moment, Princess was so tired that she went to bed and found the kits in her bed.
Christmas morning, Princess handed the cats over and Saraphine looked confused, then a look understanding dawned her face. "this is MY cat." she said with a sheepish smile "But you can keep her and one of her kits." Saraphine handed the male kit, Stonekit, to Princess. "The mother's name is Bluefur. I'll keep the she-cat, Mistykit." Saraphine and Princess both thought out loud,"This is just what I wanted."
This is truly amazing Alyssa. I love your creativity, keep up the good work. Even though I am afraid of cats you made them sound cute. I love how in the end they both get their way.
DeleteAlyssa I like how your plot went. The lost cat and the problem that the kittens went missing was great. I love this story.
DeleteI love your characters! They made me want to keep reading.
DeleteHi, I am Awesome Panda, the most fun Panda ever born. I live in Virginia Beach. I love playing at the Beach and playing outside. It is almost Christmas right? I want a whole lot of stuff this year. It is a good thing I am not on the naughty list or I would just get coal. I want a long board, a certain type of bike, a mini race car, a carver, an elf on the shelf, some candy, and a whole bunch more. But, the thing I want most, is a pocket rocket. I have always wanted a pockety rocket, but my MOM always says no, they are to dANGEROus BLAH BLAH BLAH.Also they are to fast BLAH BLAH BLAH.So I really want one and do not care what else I get. I am only going to be happy if I get a pocket rocket. So this is what i am going to do. I am going to ask for something that is two hundred dollars and if I get it I am going to sell it. When i sell it I will buy a pocket rocket with the money! the end
ReplyDeleteThe plot is nice but I think the problem wasn't resolved. You should probely make it so you get it. I have to say still you did great!
DeleteI have to agree with Maddie. pretty much every story needs a resolved problem
DeleteChristian(Barbour)
Sounds like the problem is resolved! I know how you will get the pockety rocket. It's a nice way of keeping your audience in suspense.
DeleteWow very creative Jacqueline.
ReplyDeleteChristian(Mrs.Barbour)
off the ball jacqueline!
ReplyDeleteAustin(barbour)
Good thinking for selling it ...... but whos going to take you there????!!!!!
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Thats one good person you came up with maddy!!!
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Hey!!!! It's Donovan Christmas and I can't wait. My parents are doing a good job hiding those presents I wonder what they are. I've always wanted an electric guitar, and a 3ds xl.
ReplyDeleteI've been telling my parents and every year I have been waiting for it. But every year I never got it.But then when I get an electric guitar I'll have to learn how to play it and I dont know a person who has one. Then I figured out that my friend Sam has one.
I never thought of getting an acoustic guitar either I could have either an electric guitar or an acoustic guitar. Instead of a 3ds xl I could have a regular 3ds. Hopefully when it's Christmas I'll get either one of these items
It was two days before christmas and Skylar had to make her christmas list for Santa. She wrote down lots of things: a scooter, a bike, and a slippers. But most importantly she wanted a puppy more than anything. The next day she put the letter in her mail box. At night she made cookies and milk for santa. Before she went to bed, she put her glasses in her big drawer like she always does. In the morning she woke up to see if there was any presents. They all went down to open all the presents. She got slippers, a bike and a scooter. But she didn't get the puppy she wanted. She heard a magical noise coming from upstairs but she thought it was her mind. She went upstairs to go get her glasses and when she opened her draw a puppy leaped out and licked all over her face and Skylar got just what she wanted.
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